作文思考：科技與生活點(diǎn)評(píng) 

來源:環(huán)球教育網(wǎng) www.ielts.com.cn 2005-5-20

    學(xué)生：以下是篇習(xí)作，請(qǐng)各位指教，打分。

    我一邊寫，一邊在思考是否走題？因?yàn)槲也]有明確的概念什么是 earlier technology ，中國(guó)的四大發(fā)明是 earlier technology ，但電話，冰箱，飛機(jī)就不是 earlier technology 嗎？這個(gè)相對(duì)的時(shí)間點(diǎn)題目沒明確，我也就認(rèn)為它是較早的技術(shù)了。但我太沒把握。-----請(qǐng)各位老師及同學(xué)指教！不勝感謝。

    Some people think that the earlier technology has changed our life more than the recent technology. Do you agree or disagree? 

    Nowadays, there is a trend that the development of technology has been rapidly. New inventions have been gradually growing. As a result, some people may say that the recent technology has changed our life more than the earlier one. Personally, I doubt whether the argument can hold water. I am in support of the opinion that the earlier technology has changed our life more than the recent one. 

    On the one hand, to the large amount of people, the earlier technology has brought huge influence. It is much more convenient for lots of people to use those earlier inventions, including but not limited the fridge and telephone, to operate their routine life. To put price and popularity into perspective, the price of the earlier technology tends to be cheaper, comparing to the new production of the recent technology. Consequently, the popularity is higher. That is to say, it is the lives of more people that have been changed by the earlier technology. Moreover, some recent technologies are not connected with host of people, for example, the invention of airplane, which be regarded as the recent technology, indeed only benefits some people, but not the large amounts of people. 

    On the other hand, the earlier technologies, from the utility of fire to the discovery of agriculture farming to the making tools with copper and other metal materials, make the huge progress of human being itself. The earlier technology is the base of most of the recent one. The aims of several recent technologies are to make the original even much faster, larger. From this point of view, their power of influence toward human being is less than the earlier technology, which is brand-new and revolutionary. 

    Taking into consideration what I have mentioned above, it can easier to come to the conclusion that it is the earlier technology, rather other the recent one, that contributes to our life. 

    bqiana：

    一邊倒的很厲害啊，題目的觀點(diǎn)其實(shí)說的很含糊，earlier的定義是什么，recent的定義又是什么？

    客觀分析，凡是技術(shù)發(fā)明，在任何歷史時(shí)期，都對(duì)人類產(chǎn)生深遠(yuǎn)的影響，從四大發(fā)明，到互聯(lián)網(wǎng)，克隆...

    一定要打破寫作一邊倒的思維慣性，從自己的生活中找尋答案，而不是為了寫作而寫作，跳出框架，這樣行文才更有力，更有寫的激情

    用詞用句還是不錯(cuò)的，雖然套話用的多了些，細(xì)察高手寫的英文原版，發(fā)現(xiàn)是不太用‘首先，其次’‘一方面，另一方面’的。6分是有的！繼續(xù)努力！

    學(xué)生： Many thanks.

    I still have a question.向這種Do you agree or disagree? 的題型，我們不是一般可以寫成I agree 或I do not agree嗎？這樣一定就是一邊到了，不能腳踩兩只船啊。我仔細(xì)體味您的指點(diǎn)，領(lǐng)悟到可以寫兩邊都寫好的只要在最后一段寫明自己的觀點(diǎn)即可。----心得可否正確？

    By the way, I noticed it is you who have answered my questions several times.Again, many thanks for your time and help.