雅思寫作7分作文點評


來源：環(huán)球教育網(wǎng) www.ielts.com.cn 2005-7-8

    English as a global language

    The discussion about whether English becoming a global language has brought us more benefits than risks is a very controversial one. People can hardly reach a consensus on this issue. Before presenting my view, I would like to explore both sides of the argument.

    It is very clear that English as a global language has brought us enormous benefits in all aspects of society, which has greatly promoted our economic development. To begin with， as a tool of cross-cultural communication, English promotes mutual understanding and friendship， removing prejudice and h123lity. It is no exaggeration to say that English helps maintain the world peace. Moreover, English offers us a good opportunity to learn from developed countries. For instance, China, a developing country, is in great need of advanced knowledge and technology. English as a global language removes the language barriers for us, so that we can introduce foreign experts to our country more conveniently 

    However, it can not be denied that English also exerts a negative influence on our human civilization. Since English becomes a dominant language, a large number of indigenous languages are on the verge of extinction, which poses potential risks to the cultural diversity. Just imagine, if everyone in the world looks the same, speaks the same, and thinks the same, our world will become a homogenous one. How terrible it is! It is widely accepted that language is the vehicle of culture, so killing language equals killing culture. In doing so, we erase whole histories and bury entire stories, the richness of which the world loses forever.

    Obviously, English like anything else, has more than one face. Its advantages should never keep us from their drawbacks. From my perspective, English and other languages can go side by side with each other, each shinning more brilliantly in the other’s company.

    吳建業(yè)老師的點評：

    1．結(jié)構(gòu)合理。 本文作者采用了雅思寫作經(jīng)典的等分結(jié)構(gòu)：PARAGRAPH 1 INTRODUCTION； PARAGRAPH 2 FOR；PARAGRAPH 3 AGAINST；PARAGRAPH 4 CONCLUSION（MY OPINION）。許多環(huán)球教育高分學員均采用了PASSPORT TO IELTS推薦的標準模式。

    2．路標明顯。作者能準確運用老師課堂講授的經(jīng)典表達方式，令文章條理清晰，層次感強。
    3．語法扎實。能較好運用各種句式，沒有出現(xiàn)低級語法小錯，體現(xiàn)較強的語言能力。
    4．用詞精確。作者準確運用寫作十大原則核心詞匯，善于換用不同表達方式，用詞貼切，準確。
    5．善于積累萬用觀點。從文章的用詞和論點論據(jù)可以看出作者善于積累萬用觀點。其中不少觀點和詞匯均來自《最新雅思考試勝策――寫作》文化類話題，作者并非機械照搬，而是巧妙地把不同話題的觀點和詞匯結(jié)合在一起，為本話題服務，從而做到以不變應萬變。
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