Patrick10日范文：提高道理安全須用重典

來源：環(huán)球教育網(wǎng) www.ielts.com.cn 2005-9-13 

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    高分關(guān)鍵詞：car ownership汽車占有量 incidence 發(fā)生率 car wrecks 撞車 perpetrators 肇事者 stiff punishment/severe punishment/ harsh penalty 嚴(yán)厲的懲罰 halt/curb 遏制 rampant 猖獗的 apprehensive 形容詞，對……有所顧忌的 surveillance camera 監(jiān)控?cái)z像頭 promulgate 頒布（法令） hazard （危險(xiǎn)） forestall=prevent 預(yù)防 pedestrian 行人
jaywalk 違章橫穿馬路 circumvent 規(guī)避 the law enforcement執(zhí)法(部門) draconian（法律）嚴(yán)厲的 lax (法律)松懈的 

    The soaring car ownership in China has thrown the issue of traffic accidents into sharp relief. According to recent research conducted by China's Ministry of Transportation, the annual incidence of car wrecks is nearly three times as high as the corresponding figure a decade ago. Many people have been alarmed by this trend and assert that imposing stiffer punishment on the perpetrators is the only effective way to curb this disturbing phenomenon. Speaking for myself, I tend to believe their view has both merit and demerit. 

    Granted, more severe penalty does carry certain advantages in halting the rampant driving offenses on the roads. First and foremost ,it would be the most cost-effective way to deter those would-be driving offenders. Heavy fines, long community service or even jail terms would render most of the aggressive drivers apprehensive about violating the traffic law, even without extra government funding to upgrade traffic surveillance cameras or augment traffic police force. Further, the effect of this hardline approach would be immediate. Once the related law is promulgated, we would be sure to witness a substantial decline in driving offenses overnight. 

    However, there are also traffic hazards that we cannot forestall by merely stiffening the punishment of aggressive or destructive driving conduct. To begin with, pedestrians who habitually jaywalk will not be discouraged by this move. Pedestrians account for a considerable proportion of traffic-accident culprits. Thus, pedestrian offenses such as jaywalking must be effectively checked as well. Secondly, if people who are regularly behind the wheel are not awakened to the horrific perils traffic offenses may breed , some of them will exploit every possibility to circumvent the law enforcement capability. If people abide by the traffic law solely out of fear for punishment, when a surveillance camera is out of order or the traffic police fail to keep tabs on a specific section of a freeway, all hell would break loose. Lastly, strict punishment of disorderly driving conduct does not guarantee infallible detection of driving offenses. Without sophisticated traffic-offense detecting apparatuses and an alert traffic police force, traffic laws, no matter how draconian, would be lax enough for hardened reckless drivers to disregard. 

    In the final analysis, I concede that harsh penalty for driving offenders constitutes an effective way to deter irresponsible driving behavi123 However, the growing trend of flagrant driving offenses cannot be halted by stiffer punishment of driving offenders alone. Hence we must take a more integrated approach to this modern-day scourge, possibly including equally heavy punishment for pedestrian offenses, the heightening of people's awareness about the horrific consequences of reckless driving and the advancement of traffic offense detectors and more capable traffic law enforcement forces