7.例證夸張

　　For example, when a doctor faces a patient who has got cancer, the doctor cannot tell the truth, for the truth may cause the patient’s immediate death.

　　雖然善意的謊言是必要的，但是其功效顯然沒有這么大。

　　8.成分多余

　　According to a comprehensive investigation which is carried out by Chinese Academy of Social Sciences shows that there is an increase in the number of university students who are taking part-time jobs.

　　該句中的shows that是多余的成分。

　　9.詞性混亂

　　However, the questions such as "Have you ever regretted marrying your husband" may be very privacy and embarrassingly.

　　句子中的privacy和embarrassingly應(yīng)該改成private和embarrassing。

　　10.文體不正式

　　All of the players gonna to tell the truth in attempt to win $500,000.

　　——gonna過于口語化。

　　In addition, I think people shoudn’t always tell the truth to others.

　　——在托福作文中盡量不要用縮寫，這里應(yīng)該寫should not。

　　11.兩個(gè)獨(dú)立句子間無連詞

　　Another point is that young people are more aggressive and energetic, and it’s suitable for them to choose such jobs, which will provide them with rich experience that is essential for their future success.

　　這個(gè)錯(cuò)誤犯的頻率相當(dāng)高，一定要注意。

　　12.時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤

　　托福大作文一般使用現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài)，除了拿過去事件作為例子用過去時(shí)態(tài)。

　　Some people claimed that news media has enormous influence and is a detrimental creation.

　　—— claimed應(yīng)該改為claim

　　13.不知所云

　　They also mention that in modern society there are too much entertainment bothering them as the huge gap lying between them and the success.

　　這句話完全不知道是什么意思，邏輯混亂，這是中國(guó)學(xué)生經(jīng)常犯的錯(cuò)誤。

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